高分请高手帮忙检查一下这篇英文有些什么错误(一)

采纳后会追加分数的 谢谢了~看起来会比较费劲 麻烦各位了 因为问题不能太长 我就分成两个帖子来问了 这是前半部分 谢谢
I was WU's direct higher authority when he was working in D.It has been **years since we knew each other because of work.WU left D in the end of March , 2007.
There is an example to testify the above viewpoints.In October , 2005,I was preparing a bad assets item.It's a big item which involved bad assets spread in 16 provinces.In order to decide our investment,we needed to do responsible research of the the assets of 16 provinces .Consequently,we distributed different provinces to different people to take charge of,a Vice President was distributed to preside over two provinces,and WU should support him as an Analyst.But the Vice President had some items else to take charge of,as a result,WU had to finish most of the work.As a fresh Analyst who had only joined D for half a year,WU had to finish all the Due Diligence and valuation in a short time,he was facing quite big difficulties and challenges.
Nevertheless,WU orgnized a lawyer team to finish commercial and legal due diligence efficiently,besides,he found a good real estate assessment company locally,thus he finished the real estate assessment of the bad assets item.In order to finish the task smoothly,WU worked very hard during these time,and with his good ability of solving problems and communicating ,he managed the whole process successfully and finish all his work on time,he contributed so much to the item's sucess.
WU appeared to be more mature and staider at work among all the Analysts .I could feel relieved when interacting with the clients with him,never worried if he would mess up the affairs.On the contrary,the other Analysts needed more cultivation and exercise.
When first joined D,like other Analysts,WU did not know much about investment.However, he had outstanding study ability, and worked quite hard, half a year later, he became a significant member of the group ,he was capable of making perfect financial model and business analysis, and also capable of leading the third consultants group to accomplish the responsible research.
WU is easy to get along with,he has strong teamwork spirit.Actually,as a member of the team,WU cooperated with other members tightly and delightly,he was capable to finish the job under big pressure,he accomplished many deals successfully.
Hoping to finish an item quickly,WU devoted much energy to lend an impetus to the progress of the item.Nevertheless,because of expecting quick results,sometimes WU would overlook some details. It would be better to improve in this aspect for him.I ever proposed him some constuctive criticism about this,and he accepted that modestly,then made great improvement in the later work.Actually,WU is a nice man,I think he did good in accepting the constructive criticism.

he became a significant member of the group 这点用significant我觉得不太好,换成important就可以了,要不有点夸张。
WU would overlook some details.这个overlook换成ignore就好,overlook倒也没错,可是觉得有点怪。
It would be better to improve in this aspect for him.有点复杂了,改成it is better to imprve this aspect of himself。
I ever proposed him some constuctive criticism about this,是constructive吗?
其他地方写的很好。
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第1个回答  2008-08-27
先打印出来再看看哈