写作思路：从文章的写作目的、中心主旨入手，以使文章中心思想鲜明、深刻地表现出来，正文：
But when I saw the bright red handwriting, I felt as if the world was still. A low score is like a sharp sword that deeply hurts my competitive heart, and cold water falls on my face, which makes me more sober. There are two main reasons.
但当我看到那鲜红的红笔字迹时，我感觉仿佛这个世界都静止了。偏低的分数犹如一把利剑深深刺痛了我争强好胜的内心，也如冰冷的水倒在我的脸上，使我更加清醒。试分析主要原因主要有以下两点：
Hearing loss is too serious. I am very clear about the reasons for this defect, because I have hardly listened to tapes since the beginning of school, and I find reasons for not practicing listening every day, which leads to a serious loss of marks in the listening part.
听力部分失分过于严重。关于造成这一缺点的原因我是非常清楚的，因为开学到现在我几乎没有怎么听过磁带，每天都为自己的不练习听力找理由，所以导致听力部分的失分严重。
Listening, for good English learners, is not to lose points, but there are no small problems. After this blow, I have made up my mind to practice listening. No matter how late I learn every day, I will spare time to practice. I believe that with my efforts, listening will no longer be a part of lowering English scores.
听力，对于好的英语者来说是不能丢分的项目，但次却出现了不小的小题。经过这次的打击我已经下定决心一定要练习听力，不论每天学到多晚，都要抽出时间来练习。我相信，经过我的努力听力会不再是拉低英语成绩的部分。
This test is to a large extent the summary of my recent English learning and the exposure of learning problems, so this test has an extremely important role in improving my learning methods.
这次的考试在很大程度上是对我近期英语学习的总结及学习问题的暴露，所以这次考试对我改进学习方法有着极其重要的作用。
Only by finding problems in time and solving them quickly can we be a qualified learner. I believe that with my unremitting efforts, my English score will be steadily improved.
只有及时发现问题并迅速地解决问题才配做一个合格的学习者。我相信，在我坚持不懈地努力下，我的英语成绩定会稳步提升。