请大家帮我修改下 看看我这篇自我介绍

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各位，马上要准备复试了，里面有一段是英语自我介绍，接着是随机的问几个与专业无关的问题，拉拉家常，如对工作，理想啊 爱好啊 之类的。

我自己弄了一篇，其中有些翻译不上来，请大家帮我翻一下顺便挑毛病
，能修改 不吝给我改一下就更好了。
该死的百度，原来有700多积分，现在一改财富值，只能用这么多了来酬谢大家了。
这几天我看能不能多赚点分，再回报给大家

Good morning，everyone。I feel it is really a great honor to have this opportunity for a interview.
I would like to answer whatever you may raise and I hope I can make a good performance today ,to get access to this so-famous university in September. Now I will introduce something about myself briefly.
My name is linjia , although(很女孩子气的名字，但是正如你们所见，我是一个货真价实如假包换的男子汉). I am 21 years old , coming f rom hangqiu ,a very beautiful and ancient city.
I am currently a senior student at Hefei university of technology, school of electric engineering and automation. My major is automation. And I will receive my bachelor degree after my graduation in june. In the past four years, I spend most of my time on study ,and I have passed CET-4 and-6 and I have acquired basic knowledge of my major both in theory and in practice.

Generally speaking , I am a hard working man ,especially do the thing I am interested in. I will try my best with tremendous perseverance. During the days preparing for the first examination, I insist on running everyday , no matter whatever the weather was like (不管别的同学怎么去玩，去玩电脑，k歌，旅游。不管我多么想堕落下，放松下)。And just owning to this，I could concentrate on my study and succeeded in the end ……{{{我感觉这一段写别人怎么玩，我不玩可以删掉，请问大家觉得呢？}}}}
Well ， in my spare time . sometimes I prefer to stay alone ,reading , listening to the music , but I am not lonely ,I like to chat with my classmates , almost talk everything. My favourite is cooking (做菜)，中医 。
Ok ,that is all .thank you for your attention .

_____问家乡
Shangqiu ,a rather ancient city in Henan province ,. It is famous as the “火的起源地”。
Shangqiu played an important role in Chinese history “历史上曾为商朝之都”.
So it has a profound cultural background and many great heritagesites have been well reverved..
I love my hometown very much
---------问理想
做得一手好菜，because I love 美食 very much ，and 吃自己亲手做的菜，格外的好吃。
对中医理解更深一些。（医术更好些）。My father and grandfather are
Both 中医，so。。。自然就对中医产生了兴趣，而且 中医博大精深 ，里面基本蕴含了中华民族整个优秀思想。
问为什么到工大来
For one thing ,I have a lot of best friends here .for another ,it does be a very famous university.
-问为什么从自动化专业跑到电气专业。
Of course ,there is some difference between my major and my future major. But not so much , referring to some relevant information. And I believe after adequate effort ,I can make it up .(意思是弥补)。
个性的最大特点
Helpfulness and caring
朋友怎么形容你。
They say linjia is a friendly ,sensitive caring and determined person.

Q: what personality traits do you admire?
answer: Honest , flexible , and easy going

Q: 面对批评
-keep clam ,and think over
Q: 为什么考研而不是找工作？
the higher I stand ,the wider I see (感觉怪怪的，似乎不对)

Q: --问将来的工作
待遇不是太差就可以接受，关键是要有发展空间。
I am afraid it may be premature for me to predict this in detail
只想到这么多了，请大家帮我补充下。
自我介绍是不超过两分钟，我没有这样的经历，大家觉得这篇是不是有点长？

Answer 1

Good morning，everyone。It is my great honor to have this opportunity for a interview.
I would like to answer the questions whatever you may raise and I hope I can make a good performance today. Now let me introduce myself briefly.
My name is linjia , although it sounds like a girl name , but as you see, I am a real man.(很女孩子气的名字，但是正如你们所见，我是一个货真价实如假包换的男子汉). I am 21 years old , coming from hangqiu ,a very beautiful and ancient city.
I am currently a senior student at Hefei university of technology, school of electric engineering and automation. My major is automation. And I will receive my bachelor degree after my graduation in June. In the past four years, I spent most of my time on studies ,and I have passed CET-4 and-6 and I have acquired both basic theoretical and practical knowledges of my major .

Honestly speaking , I am a hard working man ,especially doing the thing I am interested in. I always persevere in doing my best. During the days preparing for the first examination, I insisted on jogging everyday , no matter what the weather was like. I kept on studying and ignored what other classmates did such as playing computer games, singing in Karaoke and travelling. (不管别的同学怎么去玩，去玩电脑，k歌，旅游。不管我多么想堕落下，放松下)。And because of this，I could concentrate on my study and succeed in the end ……{{{我感觉这一段写别人怎么玩，我不玩可以删掉，请问大家觉得呢？}}}}
Well ， in my spare time . sometimes I prefer to stay alone to readiing and listening to the music , but I am not lonely ,I like to chat with my classmates , we can talk everything. My favourite hobbies are cooking and traditional Chinese medical science (做菜)，中医 。
Ok ,that is all .thank you for your attention .

_____问家乡
Shangqiu ,a rather ancient city in Henan province ,. It is famous as the origin of fire“火的起源地”。
Shangqiu played an important role in Chinese history . It has been the capital in Shang dynasty.“历史上曾为商朝之都”.
So it has a profound cultural background and many great heritagesites have been well reserved..
I love my hometown very much
---------问理想
做得一手好菜，I am good at cooking because I love delicious food very much ，and It is so yummy to have the dishes done by myself吃自己亲手做的菜，格外的好吃。
对中医理解更深一些。（医术更好些）I have deep knowledge in chinese medicine。My father and grandfather are both doctors in Chinese medicineh 中医，so I interested in Chinese medicine naturally. Moreover, the knowledge of Chinese medicine is very wide which included a lot of wisdoms of Chinese nation.自然就对中医产生了兴趣，而且 中医博大精深 ，里面基本蕴含了中华民族整个优秀思想。
问题补充：问为什么到工大来
Firstly,I have a lot of best friends here .Secondly ,it is a very famous university.
-问为什么从自动化专业跑到电气专业。
Of course ,there are some but not much difference between my present major and my next major referring to some relevant information. And I believe I can make it up after studying hard .(意思是弥补)。
个性的最大特点
Helpfulness and caring
朋友怎么形容你。
They say linjia is a friendly ,sensitive caring and determined person.

Q: what personality traits do you admire?
answer: Honest , flexible , and easy going

Q: 面对批评
-keep clam ,and think over
Q: 为什么考研而不是找工作？
the higher I stand ,the wider I see (感觉怪怪的，似乎不对)
I want to further study in order to have a better job in the future.
Q: --问将来的工作
待遇不是太差就可以接受，关键是要有发展空间。Salary is not an issue unless it is too low, the main point is that it have huge space to develop. I am afraid it may be premature for me to predict this in detail

Answer 2

Good morning，everyone。I feel it is really a great honor to have this opportunity for a interview.
I would like to answer whatever you may raise and I hope I can make a good performance today ,to get access to this so-famous university in September. Now I will introduce something about myself briefly.
My name is linjia , although(很女孩子气的名字，但是正如你们所见，我是一个货真价实如假包换的男子汉). I am 21 years old , coming f rom hangqiu ,a very beautiful and ancient city.
I am currently a senior student at Hefei university of technology, school of electric engineering and automation. My major is automation. And I will receive my bachelor degree after my graduation in june. In the past four years, I spend most of my time on study ,and I have passed CET-4 and-6 and I have acquired basic knowledge of my major both in theory and in practice.

Generally speaking , I am a hard working man ,especially do the thing I am interested in. I will try my best with tremendous perseverance. During the days preparing for the first examination, I insist on running everyday , no matter whatever the weather was like (不管别的同学怎么去玩，去玩电脑，k歌，旅游。不管我多么想堕落下，放松下)。And just owning to this，I could concentrate on my study and succeeded in the end ……{{{我感觉这一段写别人怎么玩，我不玩可以删掉，请问大家觉得呢？}}}}
Well ， in my spare time . sometimes I prefer to stay alone ,reading , listening to the music , but I am not lonely ,I like to chat with my classmates , almost talk everything. My favourite is cooking (做菜)，中医 。
Ok ,that is all .thank you for your attention .

_____问家乡
Shangqiu ,a rather ancient city in Henan province ,. It is famous as the “火的起源地”。
Shangqiu played an important role in Chinese history “历史上曾为商朝之都”.
So it has a profound cultural background and many great heritagesites have been well reverved..
I love my hometown very much
---------问理想
做得一手好菜，because I love 美食 very much ，and 吃自己亲手做的菜，格外的好吃。
对中医理解更深一些。（医术更好些）。My father and grandfather are
Both 中医，so。。。自然就对中医产生了兴趣，而且 中医博大精深 ，里面基本蕴含了中华民族整个优秀思想。
问题补充：问为什么到工大来
For one thing ,I have a lot of best friends here .for another ,it does be a very famous university.
-问为什么从自动化专业跑到电气专业。
Of course ,there is some difference between my major and my future major. But not so much , referring to some relevant information. And I believe after adequate effort ,I can make it up .(意思是弥补)。
个性的最大特点
Helpfulness and caring
朋友怎么形容你。
They say linjia is a friendly ,sensitive caring and determined person.

Q: what personality traits do you admire?
answer: Honest , flexible , and easy going

Q: 面对批评
-keep clam ,and think over
Q: 为什么考研而不是找工作？
the higher I stand ,the wider I see (感觉怪怪的，似乎不对)

Q: --问将来的工作
待遇不是太差就可以接受，关键是要有发展空间。
I am afraid it may be premature for me to predict this in detail
只想到这么多了，请大家帮我补充下。
自我介绍是不超过两分钟，我没有这样的经历，大家觉得这篇是不是有点长？